Nurse 911's diagnosis of patient Magical Thinking by Joel Adlen

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Patient: Magical Thinking

Legal Guardian: Playwright Joel Adlen

Insurance: Pagepay Plus

Symptoms: tense tarot tapping, French fussing

Diagnosis: righteous restaurant revelations

Because Life takes Strength! And Love— love is the real magic. Love and Life in this moment is what we really got.
— Vicki

Patient Description:

Although short, sweet, and very straightforward, our recent patient arrived with immediate signs of illness. The reader is dropped suddenly into a restaurant without much introduction. Even though much of what is going on is explained later, it doesn't cure the awkwardness felt initially. Some of the dialogue came upon me as clunky and not very believable. Vicki doesn't really sell herself as a character. Mike switches from stubborn old trucker to open-sesame minded about the "B.S" magic for his wife. It was too quick a change of heart. The Rx for the legal guardian is to focus on improving each character's personality to be more believable while working to include more context in-between major plot points. 

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